a bank in a comic

4 weeks ago | ewolf20 (Member)

I'm stuck...very...very stuck. so there's this scene I'm doing where in a comic, two bankers are having a conversation. should i do a description, an action, or start off with dialogue first to set the scene.

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  1. Fiona Gregory (Moderator)

    Posted 3 weeks ago

    As a reader, I'm a fan of starting with dialogue; that helps me get into the story faster.

  2. Alexander.Hollins (Member)

    Posted 3 weeks ago

    yeah, in media res is powerful when used well, but so can basic dialogue. Ever watch the beginning of Snatch? A couple of Rabbis, having a religious conversation. then.. WHOOOM. all hell breaks loose.

  3. ewolf20 (Member)

    Posted 3 weeks ago

    hey, how can i reveal that it was a comic book all along?

  4. Fiona Gregory (Moderator)

    Posted 3 weeks ago

    Hmm..not sure if I understand about the comic, but what about something like this?

    "How's business, Ted?" asked the portly man in the three piece suit, sipping a takeaway coffee as he leaned across his colleague's desk. Behind him I could see bank customers lined up in front of a teller's booth through the glass office window.

    "What kind of question is that at a time like this?" shot back the seated man shrilly - at least I suppose it was meant to be shrilly from the way the text in his speech bubble was bolded in a jagged font. "Have you heard what's going on-?!" His face was either distorted with anger or just drawn crudely.

    I frowned and turned the page. What I saw next startled me into almost dropping the comic book.

  5. ewolf20 (Member)

    Posted 3 weeks ago

    that's good enough. a shame i took a more prose like approach. might change that afterward.

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