A Sentence

11 months ago | Jim Zoetewey (Moderator)

I'm not claiming this is brilliant or even necessarily good, but I'm happy to have written this line:

“Dammit,” the plant said, and a turret popped out of the bottom of its pot.

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  1. revfitz (Member)

    Posted 11 months ago

    I'll claim its brilliant! Half of me hopes to never know the context of this, but I am far too curious...

    Existential Terror and Breakfast--A serial with cereal.
    Updates Wednesdays at: revfitz.com
  2. BGHilton (Member)

    Posted 11 months ago

    It does the best thing that a sentence can do -- it makes you want to read the next sentence.

  3. Maromar (Member)

    Posted 11 months ago

    I once heard somewhere that no one starts a sentence with damnit. I'm glad to see this "nugget of wisdom" debunked once more.

    The first step to becoming a hero is being mulched by a truck: https://mysticnanblog.wordpress.com/2017/03/22/spark-i/
  4. Alexander.Hollins (Member)

    Posted 11 months ago

    Jim, if it helps, I made the mistake of reading that update at work, choked on my soda while laughing, and got stares from coworkers. I thought it was fucking Brilliant! :insert Ron Weasley:

    Revfitz, have you tried Legion of Nothing? its one of the salty old men of the serial community, and well worth the read. I've used it to get probably a dozen comic friends into reading web serials.

    @BGhilton sadly, it was a cliffhanger of a sentence, ending an update. so it does double duty, it makes you want that next update faster!

  5. revfitz (Member)

    Posted 11 months ago

    @Alexander.Hollins
    I have only read the first chapter (back when I did my challenge), but it is on my reading list! I might have to bump it up to the top...

    Existential Terror and Breakfast--A serial with cereal.
    Updates Wednesdays at: revfitz.com
  6. TanaNari (Member)

    Posted 11 months ago

    It does have an of absurdist charm to it.

    Author of Price.

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