Chosen Shackles - Review Swap (and ergonomics?)

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  1. Shaeor (Member)

    Posted 1 month ago

    @Rhodeworks :D

    @SovereignofAshes A very kind review! Thank you.

    CHOSEN SHACKLES The screen is running static. Face your shadow.
    DIRGE The light is dying. Hold your breath and go gently.
  2. SovereignofAshes (Member)

    Posted 1 month ago

    @Shaeor,

    Thank you for your past review, it meant a lot.

    If there's anything wrong with the review I posted for C.S., please let me know so I can fix it; if I forgot something, or was off about something. You've got a solid project, and I can't wait to check out more of your work in the future.

    I have stuff on here too! The Vorrgistadt Saga.
  3. Megajoule (Member)

    Posted 1 month ago

    @Shaeor

    I'd love to do a review swap! I love cyberpunk and vaporwave aesthetics, and that summary sounds right up my alley!

    https://inheritorsserial.com / a clone of the greatest superhero in the world, with only a fraction of the power
  4. Kraken Attacken (Member)

    Posted 1 month ago

    If and when my novel is listed, i'd definitely be down for doing a swap...just after I get through with one other review. Reading SovereignofAshes review convinced me that I need to read Chosen Shackles as well!

    Author of: The Ascendant Age - Currently Ongoing
    https://ascendentage.wordpress.com
  5. Shaeor (Member)

    Posted 1 month ago

    @Sovereign It was a great review. I wouldn't ask for any changes. Woot!

    @Revfitz I'll get your review done soon! I just wanted to say that your encouragement from the very earliest days has definitely helped me to write Chosen Shackles. I loved reading your take. I was curious what you'd suggest for improving Chosen Shackles specifically, because I wasn't certain how to address the criticisms you had.

    @Megajoule & @KrakenAttacken The more the merrier. It goes without saying, but I will have to see to the commitments I have already made before I can even say yes, but both your serials look good.

    As always, adoration for all my writer comrades.

    CHOSEN SHACKLES The screen is running static. Face your shadow.
    DIRGE The light is dying. Hold your breath and go gently.
  6. revfitz (Member)

    Posted 1 month ago

    @Shaeor

    No worries. Your serial really is one of my favorite things right now, and I was genuinely disappointed when I thought that it was abandoned.

    Aside from putting some light edits to keep everything in past tense, I thought that you spent too much time in the first act. Before I continue I just want to let you know that I have read your essay around 5 times, so I understand the aesthetic and artistic direction that you want to take it in. The dissonant feelings, the alienation and commodification of life, all of that you do DAMN well. But I think that you could get rid of a few of the early chapters, or condense and combine a few of them. Does that help?

    Existential Terror and Breakfast--A serial with cereal.
    Updates Wednesdays at: revfitz.com
  7. Rhodeworks (Member)

    Posted 1 month ago

    I'd agree with what Revflitz is saying about condensing some of the chapters.

  8. SovereignofAshes (Member)

    Posted 4 weeks ago

    Hoping this post will free Shaeor from the purgatory of not posting on this thread.

    *Shazzam!*

    I have stuff on here too! The Vorrgistadt Saga.

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