Entirely Presenting You - Review Request/Swap

10 months ago | nippoten (Member)

It's been a little under a month since I got listed (yay!) and I just recently concluded my first arc.

I figured now would be a decent time to finally start asking for reviews.

Here is the site: https://entirelypresentingyou.wordpress.com/

And here is a link to first chapter: https://entirelypresentingyou.wordpress.com/2016/09/30/yomi-001-a-fools-apple/

Reviews are appreciated, from 5s to 1s.

If you want to do a review swap, just let me know how far into the work I need to be to appropriately judge it. Also, know that it might take me forever to do it.

Thanks ahead of time!

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  1. Is_Generally_Hostile (Member)

    Posted 10 months ago

    I'll give it a whirl.

    I'm not sure how far you'd need to read through mine to make a solid judgement, but once you've got an idea of what you think about it then further reading probably won't change it.

    Check out my shitty web serial at http://TheComatoseGirl.wordpress.com
  2. nippoten (Member)

    Posted 10 months ago

    Awesome. @Is_Generally_Hostile

    I'll take a crack at your serial later in the week. Hopefully I can get in a review in a reasonable time frame.

  3. Scott Scherr (Member)

    Posted 10 months ago

    Hello Nippoten,

    Your story sounds like its right up my alley (or in my dark corner of it... lol). I wouldn't mind doing a review swap if interested. Mine is a horror story and it's rather long and graphic at times. If you want to give it a peek to find out if you're interested, just let me know. As far as how long you should read for review purposes, well, the first seven chapters cover the first arc (twenty episodes total). I'd say at least that much would give you an idea. Just know going in that my story centers around multiple leads that don't get together until the tenth chapter.

    Author of the apocalyptic series, Don't Feed The Dark. http://freezombienovel.wordpress.com
  4. nippoten (Member)

    Posted 10 months ago

    Thanks for the interest, @Scott Scherr.

    I won't mind making this a review swap. If that's the case, I'll go up to the tenth chapter at least :)

  5. Scott Scherr (Member)

    Posted 10 months ago

    Sounds great. It might take me a few days to get started but I look forward to reading your story. Love the title, by the way. It's catchy ;)

    Author of the apocalyptic series, Don't Feed The Dark. http://freezombienovel.wordpress.com
  6. Is_Generally_Hostile (Member)

    Posted 10 months ago

    Scott's a great writer and reviewer Nippoten! If you like zombies, it's a fun read. For me, the only thing I would say that's been better, web fiction wise, has been Worm.

    Check out my shitty web serial at http://TheComatoseGirl.wordpress.com
  7. nippoten (Member)

    Posted 10 months ago

    Looking forward to the review, then, and reading both of your serials of course! Although, it will take a bit, life is crazy right now.

    And Scott, thanks for liking the title!

  8. Is_Generally_Hostile (Member)

    Posted 10 months ago

    I posted my review.

    I didn't love it, but once you got into the actual vampiric bits it definitely got better. Curious to see where this goes from here and how you evolve form this.

    Check out my shitty web serial at http://TheComatoseGirl.wordpress.com
  9. nippoten (Member)

    Posted 10 months ago

    Thanks for checking it out, and for being critical. My review for yours won't be for another while, so bear with me.

  10. Is_Generally_Hostile (Member)

    Posted 10 months ago

    Absolutely. Hope I wasn't too harsh. I definitely enjoyed the vampire bits. Curious as to the nature of the initial vampire.

    Check out my shitty web serial at http://TheComatoseGirl.wordpress.com
  11. nippoten (Member)

    Posted 10 months ago

    Not too harsh, though a half-point extra wouldn't be so bad...

    I'm just kidding.

    After reading your review though, it made be briefly consider moving the arc illustrations elsewhere, either to the bottom of the chapter or just keep it in a separate gallery page on the site. Perhaps making my terrible art the first thing people see when clicking isn't the best thing after all.

  12. Fiona Gregory (Moderator)

    Posted 10 months ago

    I like the title page image, don't get rid of that.

  13. TanaNari (Member)

    Posted 10 months ago

    The art looks fine, in a 'cutesy' sort of way... having not read the story (vampires, not my thing, sorry) I can't tell you if it fits the story it goes with well or not, but assuming your story is relatively cute and lighthearted, then the art works just fine.

    Now if we open it up and find bloody carnage spelled out in loving detail... then maybe you should consider changing it.

    Author of Price.
  14. nippoten (Member)

    Posted 10 months ago

    @Fiona Gregory, I'm actually really proud of the banner image, so that won't go away.

    @TanaNari, I suppose I like that it doesn't fit with the story that well, but that's just me.

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