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  1. TanaNari (Member)

    Posted 6 months ago

    Was it? I am looking and I cannot find it.

    Author of Price.
  2. Rhodeworks (Member)

    Posted 6 months ago

    I'm doing SoA's serial next, then going to do yours. First page of the thread.

  3. TanaNari (Member)

    Posted 6 months ago

    Ah, fair enough. Guess I had a brain fart and thought they'd be done more or less in order of request or something.

    Author of Price.
  4. Carcharocles (Member)

    Posted 4 months ago

    I'm just curious, not trying to be a bother but... did The Revelation make the list? It's been five months since I made the request, and it seems it hasn't been reviewed yet. If it didn't, no worries, and if it somehow got missed, no worries there either. As I said, I'm just curious.

  5. Rhodeworks (Member)

    Posted 4 months ago

    I'm up to Chapter 2 of Revelation as we speak. I didn't read anything for about the past month due to a whole bunch of factors but it's coming along!

  6. Carcharocles (Member)

    Posted 4 months ago

    Thanks for the insightful review! I'm aware of the pacing issues, it's something I've been working on. The writing style causing issues with the horror aspect is news to me, but I can't say I disagree with it. That said, I'm happy the review was otherwise good! I've always had this fear that I'm a hack, but it seems I'm just an amateur instead. :)

    I've posted a link to your review to my website's twitter page, its Facebook page, and the news page on the website itself. I've also posted a link to Not All Heroes, since I feel it's only fair!

  7. Rhodeworks (Member)

    Posted 4 months ago

    You're absolutely not a hack!

    The thing I'd point to with the horror being hamstrung by the style came to mind first with the sequence that had this sentence: "and a granite throne so massive that she shuddered to think who was meant to use it."

    I think it's a wonderful image. There's something unsettling about an empty throne. I think it's one of those things that can make people uneasy due to our belief that if there's a throne, well, someone has to sit on it. They might be dead or missing -- or maybe they're coming back, and there's the threat of them just outside like the giant in Jack and the Beanstalk, y'know?

    So, the thing with this sentence is that it doesn't actually tell us how 'massive' the throne is. A massive throne could be as big as a car, or it could be as big as a mountain. IMO, something more like...

    "and a vast granite structure that stretched so tall that it made Fiona dizzy to contemplate. But through the vertigo, she realized that it was a /throne/, and a shudder ran through her at the thought of whatever vast being was supposed to sit upon it.'

    To me, horror thrives on weird, unsettling images. I was a nWoD kid back in the day and it had some vividly weird images that have stuck with me even though I haven't cracked open a rulebook in years. I hope it helps!

  8. Carcharocles (Member)

    Posted 4 months ago

    Thanks for the tip! I used to write like that, I guess I "refined" my style too much.

  9. Seeker (Member)

    Posted 3 months ago

    Would you like to review a webnovel online? I just read Battling Records of the Chosen One online from https://www.novelspread.com. I like it very much, just share your idea with me after reading it.

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