Review Request: Do It Yourself

4 years ago | BGHilton (Member)

Hey, all.

I'm looking for a review for my recently completed serial, Do It Yourself, a comedy fantasy about a war between two big-box hardware stores.

Fair warning, it is quite long (I very cleverly decided to start promoting it when it was nearly finished, rather than when I began).

I am happy to offer a review in return -- but be aware I really find it difficult to get into erotica, so I can't promise an unbiased review, if that's what you write.

Thanks a lot!

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  1. TanaNari (Member)

    Posted 4 years ago

    I... okay, with a tag like that, I'd end up reading it just for the sake of reading it.

    You can review Price, but at this point there's six books. To ask someone to read them all is unreasonable. Fortunately, my series is a lot like Discworld in structure (that's really the only way they're alike)- there are multiple series that are unrelated, focusing on separate characters and storylines and you don't need to read all of them, simply a given story's sequel chain.

    So, which would you prefer...

    1- Death of a Hero (name change pending) and its sequel Nothing Given. A boy and his quest to be the very be... uh, I mean, to revenge-murder a serial killer with superpowers while attempting to deal with the crap that is life, romance, and gang politics. Takes a long look at revenge themes and the cycle of violence. It is very much inspired by Arthurian legends. I even manage to work in a sword, and dismemberment. So much dismemberment.

    2- In Triplicate and Threefold. Something of a prequel to the first- different characters, different state, and arguably the darkest thing I've ever put to paper. I would not recommend this for the squeamish. This one runs heavy on "family" themes and was loosely inspired by Tristan and Isolde.

    3- Blue Steel and Blue Wall- Two shorter novels of the High Adventure style of serial novels and shows I grew up with back in the late 80s/early 90s. I get to drop in references to Quantum Leap, Six Million Dollar Man, and the like. It's more event and less character driven than my usual style, while still keeping to the core themes of the setting.

    So, yeah, pick the one you wanna read.

    PS- erotica is not a thing you'll have to read in any of them- I prefer the "fade to black" method of sex in storytelling.

    Author of Price.
  2. BGHilton (Member)

    Posted 4 years ago

    Thanks! Like the pitch of 'Blue Steel', so I've just started reading that. Hope I don't sound like a prude with the whole erotica thing. I don't object to the occasional sex scene, I just find it hard to get into a story that is *built around* sex scenes.

  3. TanaNari (Member)

    Posted 4 years ago

    Please read the blurb on the home page as well- it'll be in every book with the intent to "set the mood", as it were.

    Author of Price.
  4. Nico H (Member)

    Posted 4 years ago

    I'd be up for a review trade! Similarly to TanaNari, I post multiple different serials on my site so I'd only ask you read whichever interests you most! Yokaishiteru's first arc just finished, and Akuma's first arc is finishing up on July 29th, while Checkboxes isn't finishing an arc for three more chapters at this point, if closure is something you'd be looking for in reading! I also don't write erotica.

    Currently writing Yokaishiteru! and Others
  5. BGHilton (Member)

    Posted 4 years ago

    Hi Nico! I'm up for that -- will get started on it as soon as I'm finished with TanaNari's books. Shouldn't take long, they're real page turners (or whatever the online equivalent of 'page turners' is).

  6. Nico H (Member)

    Posted 4 years ago

    Awesome, thank you! I'll start reading DIY right away!!

    Currently writing Yokaishiteru! and Others
  7. BGHilton (Member)

    Posted 4 years ago

    Posted my review of Blue Steel/Blue Wall. Quite enjoyed it. Look forward to reading more, but for now I'm on to Yokaishiteru!

  8. TanaNari (Member)

    Posted 4 years ago

    Yeah, based on the complains you had with the Blue series, you'll like the other books more. Far less competent main character, far more character driven.

    I'm enjoying DIY... lots of humor, good drama.

    Author of Price.
  9. BGHilton (Member)

    Posted 4 years ago

    @ TanaNari - Yeah that's the impression I had. I really quite enjoyed the setting, and like I say Warren grew on me as a character.

  10. BGHilton (Member)

    Posted 4 years ago

    @ Nico H - I'm sorry to do this to you, but I've been reading Yokaishiteru and I'm really not entirely comfortable with the subject matter of the story. That's on me -- I should have looked at your site a little more closely before saying I'd review it. I could write a review of chapter 1 if you like, but suspect it might be better if I didn't.

    Obviously, having let down my end of the deal, please don't feel in any way obligated to review my work in return.

    Sorry for this, and once again -- all my fault for not doing my research.

  11. Nico H (Member)

    Posted 4 years ago

    Oh, that surprises me; Of my serials, that's definitely the lightest one out of the bunch. I totally understand though and there's no reason to keep reading if it's tough! I know that my heavy subjects aren't for everyone, and that one does have its serious/darker moments too.

    Currently writing Yokaishiteru! and Others
  12. TanaNari (Member)

    Posted 4 years ago

    I think the "lightness" is part of the problem. You interject humor into some really messed up stuff. Which is fine, if you're going for pure comedy. But you're also trying to play it straight, as drama.

    The two flavors aren't working well together.

    Incidentally, currently doing your review. Expect it to be a more long winded version of what I said here.

    Author of Price.
  13. TanaNari (Member)

    Posted 4 years ago

    Oops... Okay, in coming back after posting the review, I can see my post might get confusing given the posts before it.

    I was talking about BG's story being a mix of light and some messed up stuff, and have nothing to say for or against Nico's, as I haven't read a single word of it. You'd think, as a writer, I'd be better at clarifying my own words... but no, clearly I cannot.

    And I can't edit the prior post since the time limit elapsed.

    Author of Price.
  14. BGHilton (Member)

    Posted 4 years ago

    Heyo, TanaNari -- Thanks for the review. I see where you're coming from with the light/dark thing -- some food for thought while I'm writing the next part.

    Thanks again!


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