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7 years ago | G.S. Williams (Member)

My first story, No Man an Island, is a complete novel with good ratings on WFG. I'm not too worried about it (though you can read it if you want to).

My second story, The Surprising Life and Death of Diggory Franklin, is an ongoing serial, and I'm not worried about completing it (having too much fun) and it's also been well-received. You can read that if you want to also.

My problem is my third story, The Samaritan Project. I have NOT submitted it to WFG because it's not in any shape for a review. In fact, I'm at the point that I don't know if I want to keep writing it. I need some objective people to drop by and take a look. Here's my blog where I worry about it: http://gavinwilliams.digitalnovelists.com/node/682 and there are links to find my stories there.

I need some perspective on whether the story as it has been conceived is worth continuing, or if I need to start over somehow.

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  1. G.S. Williams (Member)

    Posted 7 years ago

    I'm seriously not kidding. I need help figuring out whether the story needs reorganizing or reformatting or what. Any insight at all would be much appreciated.

    If people need a direct link to the start of the story, here it is: http://gavinwilliams.digitalnovelists.com/samaritan

  2. intergal (Member)

    Posted 7 years ago

    I'm having a look right now, and will post back as soon as I have some solid feedback. All I can say at the moment is that it looks quite pulpy, maybe more so than your other projects?

  3. G.S. Williams (Member)

    Posted 7 years ago

    Oh for sure. I've been writing stories with these characters since I was eleven and reading my dad's X-men comics. I keep working on other projects and then coming back to it -- I figure space will help me figure out how to improve the structure, because I like the characters.

    However, this newest incarnation isn't flowing the way I would like to. My other projects, No Man an Island and Diggory Franklin, are way more structured and I think much better stories as a result.

    I'm honestly too close to the material to see it properly -- I can't be objective because I've spent twenty years revisiting these characters over and over. If it sucks, I can't tell. If it has potential, I can't tell. It's weird because I'm usually pretty objective and can tell where I can improve my own writing -- No Man an Island is vastly different now than it was five years ago, because I learned from my mistakes.

    I can't seem to do that with the Samaritan Project, hence the asking for help.

  4. G.S. Williams (Member)

    Posted 7 years ago

    I've wound up Volume 2: Patriot Acts in favour of Volume 3: Reinvention. I'm concentrating more on three main characters (and they're basically together in every scene, it's not like I'm bouncing around) to see if that improves the story.

    Anyone interested in seeing if I can reinvent the narrative mid-stream is welcome to check it out.

  5. Eli James (Moderator)

    Posted 7 years ago

    I'm sorry for being late to this - but I must say that I loved The Samaritan Project. I finished all of it in one (longgg) sitting, and I'd be really interested to have you continue the story again, Gavin.

    So - what say you?

  6. G.S. Williams (Member)

    Posted 7 years ago

    Oh I'm continuing -- I'm chiselling away at a new direction for the storyline to consolidate the narrative and give the audience a bit more characterization (since it's been heavily weighed towards ensemble and plot) because I think the story needs a stronger heart -- but I'm sure there will still be plenty of action and the ensemble cast will still find a way to be featured.

    It's nice to hear that it's being read -- it seems to get less comments than my other stories so I wasn't sure.

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