Well, first off, I'd prefer that I don't get a critique of my site in this thread as a returned favor. I don't have a lot of internet time at the moment, despite having an incredible amount of commitments, so I simply wouldn't have time (not to mention the web skills) to make any changes suggested. I hope you don't mind if I just give you the feedback you wanted, and take a rain check on the returned favor. ;
Oh, and while I'm thinking about it: if you don't get all the feedback you'd like here, you could always join some different web design communities. Several have forums specifically for site critiques, and I know a few web fiction and ebook forums (asides from this one) that have entire sections of their sites devoted to layout reviews.
Now, onto your site. The very first thing I noticed, before you even asked for help, was that your url is confusing for me. There's another website out there that has 'apocolypsenovel.com' as the url (one which has been around since 2005), and I know that once when I was searching for that site, I got it confused with yours until I glanced at the pages. Perhaps a url change to avoid confusion might help. Then again, maybe I'm just easily confused. ;
I also thought your site was green before (I love lime green, so I thought it was nifty). I'm not a big fan of the orange. I know you can't change that on weebly without changing the layout, but the color is seriously distracting for me. Add in the faint gray diagonal lines and my eyes are begging for mercy. The art's awesome, however. Did you commission it, or -- ?
As for the summary font, the bold italic font doesn't do much for me. Especially considering that the slant of the italicized letters contradicts the gray lines of the background, it leaves me feeling a bit dizzy. It seems over-formatted for very little reason. It's the first text on the page -- unless you make it really small or a garish color, it's almost guranteed to get out attention WITHOUT all the bells and whistles. The one thing you might want to consider doing is justifying the text -- it looks better on most websites in cramped spaces.
I agree with adding more pages to the website. Something perhaps about the characters, or an about the author page, or something. Part of the joy of web fiction is being able to share more with your readers, so you should take advantage of that. I know that both as a reader and reviewer, I weigh how many interesting extras the site has to offer when I evaluate a story (be it for myself or others).
As Sora suggested -- really not a fan of having Chapter One on the main page. It just seems like too large of a jump between the summary and the work, almost as if it were being thrown at me. Giving the chapter its own page will give it a seperate ambience, and let readers catch their breath before making a decision and plunging into the world.
The fact that you've titled your site "Apocalypsenovel" is a bit confusing. If I didn't remember it being listed here as something else, I might not have understood which was the serial's title and which was the subtitle (for awhile, I thought the novel was called "Apocalypse" and then the particular chapter's title was "the Lifting of the Veil"). This goes back to the url thing -- make your url and site name intuitive. That way, people looking for your story will be more likely to find it.
As for the intuitive titling thing, perhaps you should rename "Apocalypsenovel Blog" to "news" or something similiar. I didn't bother with it the first few times I came to your site, because I assumed it was a blog of the LJ sense. I only clicked it in the hopes of making a fully informed evaluation.
The text on your links page is a bit small, and the mish-mash of sites (a political blog, for instance) would probably be better served with some form of categorization -- alphabetical, favorite serials, what-have-you. I would also consider typing the site's name and then hotlinking it instead of posting the url -- it's easier to remember that way, and less cluttered.
I can't comment on the writing, though, since I haven't read it yet.
Hope that helps.