I wasn't going to do this, but after reading the review from Syphax about thirty times I feel compelled to respond. I should note as well that I contacted him and thanked him for the review and his honesty, but he never wrote back.
For the most part, he did not leave me a good review at all. It's negative, snarky and doesn't relay a great deal of truth about the story. I feel he was more bent on discouraging people from reading it then he was on giving an honest review.
I don't think he read it. If he did, then he was not paying attention. I think he skimmed through a couple of chapters and formulated conclusions based on a few paragraphs. For instance in his quote here:
The only character who mentions the "population control" theory is Jack. The main character. The only character who mentions "MKULTRA" is the CIA agent in charge of the experiment... No one else.
He also says only two of the "dozen" characters (there are actually around 30) have any impact on the plot, when really it's quite a few more, and if he'd read the story correctly instead of skimming he would have seen that.
He then compares it to Mortal Kombat... and there is NOTHING comparable between the two, and I mean, nothing... He's basically comparing apples to saw blades, they're not even close.
Anyway, his whole review is written with a sort of "Don't waste your time on this garbage" derisiveness which irks me because he obviously didn't bother reading it thoroughly or completely. Also, since his review went live, I've not received one hit from webfiction, which kind of bums me out.
I understand everyone is entitled to their opinion and I was skeptical at posting my story to this site for fear that this sort of thing would happen. I mean here I am, posting a free online story for people to enjoy and took me months of personal time to write. Yet, this one person thinks it's okay to tear it apart and ridicule my creation, even when clearly he didn't read it very well to get his facts straight, and because he did this, people don't even want to check it out now it seems.
If it weren't for a few others that have found the story to be entertaining, I'd probably think that I was a no good hack-writer and quit, and maybe that's what I am... I don't say this to sound pitiful, but only to illustrate that reviewers should take more care to respect other's creations. As many writers know, it's extremely hard work to write a book and even harder to put it out there for people to read. Constructive criticism is a wonderful thing, I want it and need it, but Syphax's review seemed really destructive to me.
I absolutely expect people not to like my story and I expect plenty of negative reviews, but a negative review doesn't have to be pretentious and sarcastic to say, "I don't like what you've written." It can helpful and expose plot holes or areas that need improvement. I really thought that's what this site was for.
That's all I have to say.