Dear WFG community,
I'm facing some issues with one of the chapters of my serial that will launch in june, and would like to request help from 2 test reviewers to pinpoint those issues more concisely. I'm asking here because I don't trust my friends to be as harsh as they need to be, and I want to be sure I can deliver the kind of quality that people actually want to follow in the form of a serial. Please don't be afraid of being harsh, my Saturday writer's group regularly picks every single paragraph apart with villaineous glee. I'm used to it. I just can't wait until Saturday with this chapter, it's too important for the whole arc.
The chapter in question introduces the second of my triumvirate of main characters. The protagonist introduced in arc 1 was very popular with the test readers, and I'm concerned that I fail to provide incentive for a similar level of attachment in arc 2. I've already heard one opinion and would like two more before I re-write the whole chapter.
The total length is 3700 or so words.
If one or both of the test reviewers have some knowledge of hip hop culture, that would be a bonus. I'm wondering whether I captured the right kind of atmosphere.
I'd prefer if the reviewers haven't been in the chat with me, as some of the communication (and spoilers) that happened there could potentially influence them.
If you're volunteering, please let me know how I can contact you, seeing as the forum seems to lack a private message option.
Thanks in advance!