Over the last two months, I have been working on cleaning up previous chapters that I had written when I first started my web serial Kings & Queens. The overall reception was positive when I did some review swaps earlier last year; however, there were some critiques that I wanted to improve on before I got deeper into the series. Some of this cleaning has been changing a sentence or two, and some of it has been complete reworks. I had 37 chapters up; however, today I disabled all but the first 7 of them until I get some feedback from a larger reading community.
So, my request - I would really appreciate some feedback on this forum without it being a formal review. Feedback about the opening of the story. Is it exciting? Does it grab the reader's attention? Did I do a decent enough job explaining motivation or making the protagonist a relatable or likable individual? Did I reduce the amount of world jargon enough for it not to be overwhelming?
Any feedback is super appreciated.