I'll do yours next, and no need to worry about me not posting in the reviews section. My review of From Winter's Ashes is not in this thread. Might be the weekend when I get it out though, I want to reread what I've read. I did read some of your serial a while back, thought it was enjoyable and as advertized. Though, on the non-writing parts, I hate your buttons and a few other aspects of your layout. At the bottom of an update you have;
Newer Post and Older Post.
Most commonly things have newer post/next post on the right side. This is due in part to most of humanity being right handed, that and how English is read makes it more natural. It is a small thing, but hey, I need to find something to be mean about.
You gave me a bit of trouble you know. It was a bit awkward ending up having to write for such a serious dismal serial, considering my own content In the end as you saw I decided to go for broke and remain in the absurd.
Honestly if someone was to object to your story, they should do so on the grounds of the nihilism rather than the violence. I've read and seen(in visual fiction) far worse. Anyway, I wouldn't say I'd be happy to review it, but it is genuinely well written. You get across the soulcrushing depression and stuff quite well. A strong image of a doomed world.
I'll review it after Fooled. I may even reread it ;.;
Also I was actually planning on reviewing more, like maybe once a week at least.