Initial impressions in a minute or two of glancing through: the story could do with a beta reader or proofreader.
Your first sentence is exceptionally important, in a story. Yours has awkward structure and lacks a punctuation mark at the end.
You throw too many names at the reader right off the bat, and since they're not familiar names (names from an unfamiliar culture), readers are going to get confused. I don't have an easy way to remember who is who, so I get lost in a jumble of Elon, Eris, Adri Falin, Trudi, Dewina, Ferdi, Regi, Rajawi, Bu Lati, Yogyakarta, and Java. All in the first chapter.
I felt a little too confused, and stumbled a bit over the stiff and awkward writing, and found it very hard to read.
I hope this helps.