Review Request: The Unbroken Chaos

I asked for a review of the original version a while ago, and I'm asking for it with the new version now. It is short, and almost done, with only a few episodes left. I would like somebody to review it.

Listing: http://webfictionguide.com/listings/the-unbroken-chaos/

Site: http://endtheunbrokenchaos.blogspot.com/

Thank you for even considering doing a review of my work.


All right, I'll put you in the queue.

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Super: Sci-fi/Suspense/Adventure, with Superheroes


Decided to ask for reviews of the whole thing, since I finished it. (If I get a good idea that could continue the original idea, I may return, but that's not likely to happen)