Thoughts about the site...
It's a bit too busy, with links to all sorts of other things. At first I wasn't sure if these were all related to the story or not. The text is readable, but the color scheme doesn't serve to really amplify the story or set it off at all. The title bar reads "Prologue, Part 1 | Skip the Budgie" which tells me the name of the site, not the name of the story.
Thoughts on the story...
Profanity is a turn-off.
The pace is quick, so that helps keep reader interest up.
The characters are pretty stock.
The technology is faintly interesting, but there's just too much of it, too fast for the reader to really get a good handle on what's going on.
I get the feeling that you're going for hard SF, which works. It's just not a genre I really enjoy, so what are minuses to me are probably acceptable or plusses to those into the genre.